From dilvie on 29.12.2003, 20:49:
KarLKoX - Sadness
3 Structure
3 Dynamics
3 Rhythm
3 Melody
2 Harmonic Progression
2 Style
3 Technical Production
4 Atmosphere
3 Over-all impression
28/45
Comments:
FastVerb got replaced with the dummy plugin. Aren't we all using the official release for these compos? Sorry if it hurts your production score, Karl, but I can't see a way around this. If I replaced the reverb with a reverb I set up, it wouldn't be your production I'd be scoring.
It took me a minute to get into this track, but once I did, I really liked it. The rhythm could have been more creative, and there could have been some better use of dynamics. I also would have liked to have heard some more harmonic progression, but maybe that's just my classical background speaking.
Ploppy - 2babyhands
3 Structure
2 Dynamics
2 Rhythm
4 Melody
3 Harmonic Progression
4 Style
3 Technical Production
4 Atmosphere
3 Over-all impression
28/45
Comments:
I really like the percussion sounds and the synth work, but the chord progression is too common and you never actually went anywhere with it. I kept expecting it to do something interesting, and it just never happenned. This song would drive me bonkers after just a few listens, which is a real shame, because I love the style, and this really could have been a contender. It sounds to me like it was primarily a case of writer's block that did you in.
Liquidboy - The World Between Worlds
2 Structure
3 Dynamics
3 Rhythm
3 Melody
3 Harmonic Progression
4 Style
2 Technical Production
4 Atmosphere
3 Over-all impression
27/45
Comments:
If I was scoring titles, this would have got points for that. The intro is really cool, but as the song moves on, things start to happen that sound a lot like you've just openned up some machines and used the random values feature. There are clicks that don't sound pleasant at all. Most of the sounds are cool, but those clicks are simply annoying, and could have been avoided.
In case you're wondering about your points for melody and harmonic progression, 3 is the nominal level for all of my scoring. I didn't dock you because they didn't really apply much to your piece. I really enjoyed some of the ambient sounds you created, but nothing struck me as terribly original. These are all sounds I've heard before, and while the presentation was nice, it wasn't genius.
For future reference, you could have scored a lot higher if you'd been much more creative with the effects processing and created a more lively soundscape.
Nolwenn - Tribal Sex
2 Structure
1 Dynamics
4 Rhythm
2 Melody
2 Harmonic Progression
4 Style
4 Technical Production
3 Atmosphere
4 Over-all impression
26/45
Comments:
Help! Drowning in reverb! It's fairly cool, but just a little bit over the top, perhaps. I really like some of the percussion sounds. Good stuff. I really disliked the complete lack of anything remotely resembling dynamics. High marks on technical production, but only because the sounds were creative and the the presence was effective. Over-all, this is not a song I will listen to more than twice, but it's not a bad attempt, either. Keep it up. Don't be afraid to experiment a little more with notes, even if you use them mainly as effects and ambience (as is common in hard-hitting dance styles).
Andyk - Different Forest
3 Structure
2 Dynamics
3 Rhythm
3 Melody
3 Harmonic Progression
2 Style
3 Technical Production
3 Atmosphere
3 Over-all impression
25/45
Comments:
This song did a fairly good job setting up an atmosphere at the beginning, but it quickly lost my attention before anything terribly interesting happened in the harmonic progression. By the time things got interesting, I didn't care about the song anymore. For future reference, some of the production problems I noticed were that there was way too much reverb used on some of the lead parts, the kick had a bit too much resonance for the style of the piece, and the structure lacked dynamic movement.
Dynamic movement is very important -- there should be parts of the song that are loud, and parts that are more quiet. Give the listener a break from the droning chords now and then. Change things up. Do something to break the monotony. Over-all, the song is a worthy entry for a beginner. Keep practicing, and you're sure to make waves in the future.
D-503 - Halajaba'88
2 Structure
3 Dynamics
2 Rhythm
4 Melody
3 Harmonic Progression
3 Style
2 Technical Production
2 Atmosphere
3 Over-all impression
24/45
Comments:
There was no technical production to speak of. Where are the effects? The whole mix was far too dry for the style of the piece. Every second of the song left me thinking, "so much wasted potential! This song just isn't finished!"
Admit it, D-503 -- you submitted a WIP. Finish it and enter it next time, and I'll improve my ratings. I know you can do better than this.
Haze - Hungry
2 Structure
2 Dynamics
2 Rhythm
3 Melody
3 Harmonic Progression
4 Style
3 Technical Production
3 Atmosphere
3 Over-all impression
24/45
Comments:
This song could have scored much higher if it had better dynamics. Unfortunately, it maintained a near-peaking sound level the entire time. Dynamics are important, guys -- probably the most important part of music production. All your good style, melody, arpegios and chord progressions go to waste if the song puts me to sleep.
Speaking of chord progressions, the chords in patterns 09, 0B, and 0E could have been a little bit better. When you're building your chords, remember to choose every note carefully. You have the backing chords DFA, BDG, CEG (spelled backwards in your pattern). That's great. Those notes would normally sound fine on their own, but in the context of your song, it would probably sound better if you changed that second chord to CDG (yes, a major second, I know it's dissonant, but it's resolved in the next chord change).
It's a better choice for a couple reasons: First, the instrument you're using there contains very loud harmonics that act like chord tones in your song, so you have to take those into account, and the chord that's created when you mix in the melody line with your original chords doesn't sound pretty. Second, using CDG actually creates a good sounding dissonance that gets resolved nicely when the next chord comes along, and the new chord (CDG) has two common tones with CEG, so the chord change is smoother. Try it out. I think you'll find that it changes an awkward passage into a pleasant one.
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